*Today's flash is still inspired by the world of my Phoenix Trilogy, except over 3000 years in the future. It takes place about 15 years after last week's #fridayflash "Consequences" and focuses on the girl Apenth saved. Enjoy!*
Run!
Light blasted
inches above my head. Stone crumbled and coated my hair. The shockblaster's
beams missed again. My feet flew over the pavement. I longed for my hoverboard,
but it was too late.
We just had
to run.
"Come
on, honey, hurry up!" My mother glanced back at me. Her eyes wide in
unspoken fear. I'd never seen her afraid before, and it jumpstarted my heart to
pound more erratically.
I turned my
head. Three guards were on our heels. One raised a slender, elongated weapon.
The word "firegun" popped into my mind a second before a stream of
flames erupted from it. Heat lapped at me. I smelled smoke.
"Phoenix!"
Dad's voice cried in alarm as he patted my long hair. My singed hair.
Hurt and
anger sat bitter in my stomach. I opened my mouth to cuss them out when dad
grabbed my arm and jerked me forward.
Another shot
from the shockblaster missed me.
The rotten
smell of sewage wrinkled my nose, restricted my rapid breaths. We were nearing
Lordéhi River. They would trap us between the city and the riverbank.
"Dad, we
gotta find another way." My hand mumbled my words.
"Come
on!" Mom looked at us.
Then, she
slammed into an invisible wall.
"Mom!"
I sprinted toward her as she slumped in the capture box. My fists pounded on
solid air.
Dad shoved me
away from it. "Keep running. Don't stop."
"But
mom—"
"Don't
stop." He pushed me again, and I stumbled and fell.
I saw a capture skid across the pavement.
"Dad,
no!"
I turned to
grab him, but the metal capture disc danced along the cobblestones. It landed
at his foot. A second later the invisible glass enclosed him in. He struck it
to no avail.
"Run,
run, run!" He mouthed the word over and over. I couldn't hear him, but I
knew.
I knew.
With tears
blurring my vision, I ran.
9 comments:
That's such a sad piece. And such an intriguing world!
Again, I really enjoyed this Cherie. I feel so sorry for Phoenix knowing his parents have been captured and having to run regardless, and I'm also intrigued as to why these people are after them. The tension in this piece, from just a few words, is fantastic!
Wonderful tension! I hope he got away!
sad story, but glad she listened to her parents. Is this part of your Phoenix Prophetess? Love the new look of your blog! =)
Oh, I like it! Lots of tension and action. I also like those capture skids. Cool idea! :)
And yes, you can use the question I asked you for your Ask the Editor.
She - I meant to say she. I think I was focused on last week's Flash Fiction and got confused. Sorry for the gender-confusion. *Red-cheeked*
Whoa, this was riveting! There has to be more… Phoenix escapes then comes back to rescue her parents, right? It could be a whole new trilogy…
This left me gasping for breath. I felt like I was running with them. Good writing.
Lee
Tossing It Out
The heightened tension is so well done in this piece!
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