Friday, February 3, 2012

#fridayflash "Last Look"

Last Look

Nike pressed her palm against the cool window. Earth had never looked so beautiful and desolate as it did from space. Rusty brown coated most of the planet, but swirls of blue and puffy clouds dotted the landscape. She’d seen old pictures of Earth, but this was not her ancestors’ planet anymore.

It wasn’t hers either.

“Neeeee-kaaaaay.” The voice echoed in the spaceship, and she stiffened as boots clomped along the metallic floors toward her. “I’ve been looking for you.”

“How can I serve you, Captain?” Her fingertips trailed along the window, as if caressing a long-lost lover.

“There was a brief disturbance in Sector J. Some of the civvies are having second thoughts about the mission, and—”

“You thought I could speak with them.” How could she explain her own doubts? They were leaving the only home they’d ever known. Earth may have changed drastically since the disaster, but they were abandoning home.

“Yes, exactly that.” The captain smoothed down the fabric of her uniform. “I knew I could count on you.”

“Of course, ma’am.”

She listened to the captain leave. A sigh flowed from her lips and fogged up the window, obscuring her view of Earth. It was just as well. A new home awaited them. It was just a hop, skip, and a jump through a wormhole.

If only it could be that easy . . .


Christine Rains said...

Nicely done. If only it was that easy! Your little flash bit was able to capture the anxiety and doubt well.

Nicole Zoltack said...

I love your flash pieces, they always elave me wanting more.

mshatch said...

Liked that!

Inebriate said...

Last Look reminds me of how I've felt when leaving a place I've enjoyed but never expect to see again.

The Golden Eagle said...

The last line doesn't seem to bode well for the character.

Great flash fiction!

Kittie Howard said...

Great job! Your flash made me think of a National Geographic feature about wormholes. Could see your character there.

Anonymous said...

Really liked the ending...nice.

Rachel Morgan said...

I like the unusual name of your character! A well-written piece that conveys quite a lot of feeling in a few words :)