Friday, February 18, 2011

Flash Fiction Fridays: "Hair"

First off, I'd like to welcome all new followers and old followers too. I've seen a rapid increase in followers this month from 50 to now 80+. If I hadn't followed your blogs yet, please let me know. Leave a comment with your blog website address, so I can follow you. Special welcome to Crusaders as well! 

On Fridays, I write flash fiction and post it on the blog. Today's flash fiction is an experiment. For one, there are two stories in it. For two, one story is written in first person, present tense; the other is third person, past tense. I hope you enjoy it and don't get too confused! 


It tickles my arm, and I peer down at my skin. Where is it? I know I saw you there. I move my hand along my arm. Nope, it's gone. Not there. I breathe a sigh of relief and continue reading.

The wind screamed through the broken window. The girl huddled in the corner. He

I stop. I feel it again. The mere brush torments my flesh. I yank my hair into a bun and secure it with a clip. Much better.

—paused in front of her. Crimson eyes stared into her soul, and she stiffened. His—

The piece of hair inches along my arm, caressing me and driving me insane. My hands scan along my shirt sleeves. Surely, I'll knock it off. After several minutes, I find my place and read.

—fingers curled, and she rose from her position, unable to stop herself. Her feet—

"Argh!" The hair still bothers me. Sneaky little strand, I think. I'm about to rip my shirt off, if only I can find it and stop it forever. Lifting my sleeve up, I search in the fabric. There! I find the errant hair. My fingertips press around it and drag it away from the shirt. I toss it onto the floor, settle back down into the chair, and read.

—shuffled along the floor. Chains clanked around them, and she tripped and fell.

He lifted his hand, and she hovered before him. "You've served me well, Zapheria. But—"

The clip falls from my hair, and I snatch at it, but it clatters to the tile floor. I lean over to grab it when I feel it again. That tiny strand tickles along my chest. I swipe my hand over it. I wait a second, a minute. It's better.

—I have no further use of you." He flicked his wrist. She screamed, short and sweet, before the loud crack echoed in the room. He tossed her limp body to the dirt floor. Her head cocked at an awkward angle, and her eyes stared straight ahead in neither fear nor happiness. Just nothingness.

The book drops from my hands. The pages splay down upon the tiles. Wisps of hair curl like tentacles around my neck. I'm choking. My nails grasp at the horrible strands. Perhaps I shouldn't have bleached my hair so much, I think, or gotten that terrible hair cut that one time. They are angry, revengeful.

They tighten. I can't breathe. My vision narrows. Blackness tinges it. I rip at my neck. Blood trickles down, tickling my flesh. I feel it seep into the hair.

I can't see. 

I can't breathe.

I collapse into nothingness.


Unknown said...

Enjoyed it, Cherie! I have no hair, so it made me a little wistful ... :0)

Michael Offutt, Phantom Reader said...

Flash is my favorite character. I was sad when he died in "Crisis on the Infinite Earths". Luckily, they've plenty of Flash replacements and now all of his powers are tied to the speed force which is ridiculously O.P.

Jessica said...

Ha! I love this. Now whenever I feel a stray hair floating about I'm going to be paranoid...

Anonymous said...

Sometimes I get this feeling that there is a stray hair when there never really is. Now I'm going to get up, run around, start screaming, and blame it all on you whenever it happens again. ;D I really did like this though, I was most definitely surprised when the mutant hair attacked. . .

Michael Di Gesu said...

Hi, Cherie,

I know I followed you ages ago ...your in my blog roll, anyway I did follow again..

I'm a fellow crusader and I wanted to tell you the first challenge has been post at Rach's.

Looking forward to reading yours.


Danette said...

Dropped by from Rachael's crusade list to say hello! Looks to be a lot of fun already! Cheers! Danette

Anonymous said...

I love follower and fellow crusader. Nice to meet you.


Chantele Sedgwick said...

Hi there! I'm in your crusade group and just stopped by to say hi! *Waves!* Have a great weekend and I'm excited to get to know you!

Cathy said...

Hey fellow crusader, stopping by to follow this time, will get to know you better a little later.


Raquel Byrnes said...

Wow...intense. I've never done flash.
By the way, just dropping by to introduce myself as a fellow crusader and new follower. I'm off to tackle challenge #1 now. =)

Margo Benson said...

Greetings fellow crusader! Wow, I really liked this - finding those stray hairs is going to feel a little weird now!

Rane Anderson said...

Hey Cherie, fellow crusader & fellow group member! Just stopping by to say hello!

Cherie Reich said...

Jessica - That's how I came up with this flash fiction idea. I've always been a bit paranoid about those stray hairs.

Nikki - Thank you! It's great to meet another crusader.

Margo - Thank you! I hate those stray strands. They creep me out. :) It's great to meet another crusader.

Rane - Hi! Thanks for dropping by!